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Sapna's avatar

I had goosebumps when he saw the footprints and then they suddenly disappeared.

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Jan Herrington's avatar

Me too. Wait until you figure out what they represent.

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DW Davis's avatar

Vivid imagery. Strong emotional hook. Great start.

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Jan Herrington's avatar

I appreciate it!

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R. M. Greta's avatar

Her eyes like a doll's waiting to be painted on. Great imagery. Very spooky! I enjoyed listening to this!

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thanks! Jan writes pretty surreal sometimes. I try to emphasize it when editing.

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