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Gil Nobodi's avatar

This was really painful and escalated evenly. Very well done.

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thank you!

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Bea's avatar

This one hurt a bit. I’m a beautifully aching way. Stunning work friend. 🖤

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thanks so much, Bea! 🥹

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Pedro Chora's avatar

Great stuff. Congrats.

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

Woah this is the first one thats been upsetting for me. Such a great piece Ed, the artwork and story were really strong. I’m loving figuring out where the audio clips came from too, I get a cool reveal type thing 😅.

So cool, looking forward to checking out more of your stuff 🤘

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thanks Alex! I’m glad to hear it had the intended effect.

Ah, I should have started with the audio. I just started reading until I had a chance to listen. Now I need to go listen to everyone’s audio performances.

Charlotte will reappear in future stories.

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

Yeah there were some really great performances by people.

Cool, I’ll do my best to be following along 🤓

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RM Greta's avatar

Great work, my friend!

You went for it and it paid off.

Had some humor, some violence, some scaries, and some sads. 👏🏽👏🏽👏🏽

Everything we needed.

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thank you! Maybe I’ll have to explore horror more often.

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Rebecca Watson (ReBe)'s avatar

Perfect!!! This was so heartbreaking but stunning at the same time, great job 👏

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thanks! Maybe Gheeldyn isn’t all that bad, her methods just need a lot of improvement.

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Walt Shuler's avatar

Wow, Ed, that was both beautiful and fucking heartbreaking. Well done.

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thank you! This was the first intentionally horror thing I’ve ever written. Probably more on the creepy side than scary 😅

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Walt Shuler's avatar

I'll take all the vibes, creepy, scary, all of it.

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lightbro's avatar

Wow - powerfully written... beautifully done

The magic of secrets is a power it's own, one that binds, and can make whole.....

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thank you!

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MA Knight's avatar

Delicious!

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Ed the Editor's avatar

secrets nom nom

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Hylia Corvidae's avatar

Ahh this one has so many cool little details that I’m obsessed with

The images are great and I love how they feel like a little marker of progress through the story, the way you’ve formatted makes it so that the Gheeldyn lines aren’t able to be directly restacked which even if not intended, feels really fucking cool and ominous! I love the repeated whisper

“Your secret feed it to me” is just such a creepy line all by itself, I feel like I’m reading someone interact with something like Gollum 👀

Ugh just the entire tone throughout is so good, thank you so much for participating and making this awesome piece 🥰

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Ed the Editor's avatar

Thanks so much for being as obsessed as I was. I drew so many tiny circles trying to figure out how a teenager could draw them in her journal 😂.

Gheeldyn wants to keep all the secrets to herself. She’s a bit obsessed with them, huh? Like it’s her ring. You can’t restack them!

(This has *nothing* to do with Substack being buggy and not letting you restack poetry blocks).

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